I have been silent for the last time:
Now I will speak, and you will hear me.
All these years I've been helpless;
All these years you've tied me down.
I've waited long enough to fight back.
You think I don't see what you do to her.
Does it make you feel good,
Does it make you feel powerful,
When you beat her down,
When you fling the words at her?
Are her scars your trophies?
For so long I've had to stand by
And watch you destroy everything in your path.
But I'm not a child anymore,
Hiding in a corner while you scream at her.
She was mine long before she was yours.
Today I'm standing up, and standing between you.
I will be the only wall you can't tear down,
The only shield you can't shatter.
You feed on fear, your only power,
But I am stronger now than you will ever be.
Your reign of terror ends today:
I will not bend, and I will not break.
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The formatting is fine now, I was easily able to read your poem. It seems like you began to flow and rhyme, then the style changes. I like your style. However, it is difficult to follow at times. I do not think you were intending on "flowing" throughout the poem, ie. rhyming. Therefore, the poem is very well thought out. Question, do you write from experience? Meaning, does your poetry convey feelings and experiences you confront and deal with through writing?
Honestly, I can't hardly read this because of the way it's formatted and stuff. I dunno if you have some reason for making it like that, but it's really hard to read. Think you could put some spacing between all your words? Technically I can read it, but it hurts my head to. I don't think you'll get a lot of reviews if you keep it this way.